LAST EDITED ON 05-20-13 AT 09:36 AM (EST)I am an avid reader, averaging about three books a week, both fiction and non-fiction.
Checking out the Look Inside on Amazon, I read what was available at the beginning of the book.
I see some issues with the writing style and format. Paragraphs are longish, with too much detail about things we have not yet been introduced to, making for plodding reading in trying to absorb all of it. Also, dialog paragraphs are indented when the second line should be on the margin, making it difficult to sense the flow of dialog. This book needs an editor to work out these issues.
The content of the prologue and first chapter and a half are not enough to hold my attention. It all seems contrived, although I realize this is an alternate future work. Too much is thrown at the reader in too little space, making it seem like a bit of a jumble. Things and characters need to be introduced more slowly to allow the reader to grasp what the future world is like and connect with key characters. The Prologue is an attempt to describe it, but it doesn't stick to the reader's memory.
Advice: Slow down, introduce things more gradually, shorten the paragraphs, format the dialog correctly. I would find reading 270 pages of this quite difficult, at best, regardless of how good the plot and characterization might be.