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07-08-05, 06:36 PM (EST)
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"Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
This was just published in a new print magazine called NOÖ Journal. Thought I'd share.

Thicket

Through the window, I see the police. Lots of them, trampling down the blackberry brambles. Something reeks. I started to smell it a couple of days ago, but I convinced myself I was imagining things. It was in the 70's, then. Now, the thermometer is pushing ninety degrees and there's no mistaking the smell of decay.

Jack has been gone for eleven days this time. He's never been gone longer than three. I never called the police, though. Every night, on returning from my shift at Wal-Mart, I expected, or perhaps only hoped, to hear his stereo blaring.

The thorny vines are much too thick for the uniformed men to wade through. They've started hacking away at the mass with electric hedge trimmers. In response to the whine of the motors, the two German Shepherds strain harder at their leashes.

Jack often disappears for a day or two. During the summer, it's not as obvious — the school doesn't call to report an unexcused absence. Last time, he turned up at his father's. It would have been nice for Scott to have called me when he first arrived, but he assumed I knew Jack was there.

The men are getting close to the center of the thicket. Several of them are holding their hands over their mouths, I'd assume to filter out the smell.

I pick up the phone and dial Scott's number. Holding the receiver, I walk out onto my deck to watch the men's progress. The phone rings six times, seven. No answer.

They have created a small clearing now. There's definitely something on the ground. Four of the men have donned gloves and masks. Each takes a hold of something. They trudge out of the vines, bearing their load.

The dogs are frantic, and I can barely hear one of the cops yell to another outside the clearing, "It's a deer!"

A deer. I exhale and slowly move to the kitchen, removing my red vest from a chair where I draped it last night. I'm late for my shift.

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 RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket syren 07-11-05 1
 RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket universityofkentuckyrocks 07-12-05 2
 RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket PhoenixMons 07-13-05 3
   RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket SherpaDave 07-13-05 4
       RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket PhoenixMons 07-13-05 5
           RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket SherpaDave 07-13-05 6
               RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket PhoenixMons 07-13-05 7

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syren 5414 desperate attention whore postings
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07-11-05, 08:33 PM (EST)
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1. "RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
I know this is a non-entry...but wanted to say thanks for sharing it Sherps.

Wonderfully written.

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2. "RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
Thanks for sharing Sherpa.


UL will always suck in my book!


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07-13-05, 09:59 AM (EST)
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3. "RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
I really like how you switch back and forth between the thicket scene and the details about Jack.

Congrats on the publication!


And happy belated b-day, too!

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07-13-05, 02:29 PM (EST)
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4. "RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
Thanks. (And thanks for the b-day wishes, too. I thought everyone had forgotten. *sniff*)
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07-13-05, 03:00 PM (EST)
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5. "RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
Ha! I would've said something earlier, 'cept I was loading and unloading a U-Haul from 9 a.m. until 10 p.m. on Sunday! Yikes!


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6. "RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
Yikes is right! All moved in now?
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07-13-05, 03:23 PM (EST)
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7. "RE: Non-Entry FF: Thicket"
Mostly. Dh decided that he's going to stay in the house until after he gets back from AZ, so that means less stress for me and he doesn't have to stay in a hotel for 2 weeks (or more). He was originally supposed to leave a few days after getting back to NY, but it's been moved back at least a week. But yeah, we're mostly moved out. I do still have to clean the house and go through a lot of papers, though. A few other odds and ends, but we managed to get most of it done on Sunday. Whew! Only two more days until the big trip!


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