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"SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
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"SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
~If Only Life Were That Simple Again~

Ice crystals formed in my nostrils and then just as quickly disappeared as my labored breathe melted them away and left a trail of wet slime on my upper lip. My tongue darted out of my mouth and skillfully slurped the slime until it was decidedly not a distraction to me anymore. I continued lifting the heavy snow with my shovel, the white powder belying its true backbreaking capability.

I paused for a moment and looked out over the trees to the valley below and a winding river partially obscured by drifts that must have been twelve feet deep. The air was clean due to the large population of coniferous trees, firs with their branches heavily burdened by ice, sagging under the weight. I inhaled deeply and the scent of pine mixed with freshly fallen snow brought me back to the days when I was a kid at my Grand Dads house.

He used to make us hot cocoa on a day like today. We would work our butts off all day, my brother Jamie and me, and then wed sit by the fire and warm ourselves. Then Pops would tell stories and jokes and we would laugh until our stomachs were about to cave in from the cramped pain. It made me realize only too well how simple things were back then. No wives or kids, no stressful business partnership with a lying cheat that leaves you on the verge of suicide.

I smiled if only for a moment it was nice to be swept away by memories of youth and leave behind the harsh reality of the present. But then I looked down at the shovel and realized I had better get back to my work. The sun was starting to fade in the distance, casting tall pointed shadows across the crusty white surface that blanketed the earth. Three more big sweeping scoops and some patting with the back of the blade and I was finished.

My boots clacked across the gravel driveway, I pulled my wet glove off my left hand and opened the door of my red SUV and climbed inside. Looking in the rear view mirror for a brief second I hesitated and wondered how long it would take for them to find the body. Would it be spring when a fisherman wandered up the hill from the river? Or maybe summertime when two young lovers looking for a quiet respite from the rest of the world strayed a bit too close to the decay and stench? It could also take until next deer season when a hunter stumbled across it. Who knows? I do know one thing; I will be as far away from here as is humanly possible.


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 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... universityofkentuckyrocks 07-06-05 1
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... emydi 07-06-05 2
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... cahaya 07-06-05 3
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... zombiebaby 07-06-05 4
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... zipperhead 07-06-05 5
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... PagongRatEater 07-07-05 6
   RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... KObrien_fan 07-07-05 7
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... PhoenixMons 07-07-05 8
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... pmspml5 07-07-05 9
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... JohnMc 07-08-05 10
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... syren 07-11-05 11
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... motormouth 07-11-05 12
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... nailbone 07-12-05 13
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... dreamerbeliever 07-13-05 14
   RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... PhoenixMons 07-13-05 15
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... calamityc 07-28-05 16
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... mysticwolf 07-29-05 17
 RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were Tha... seahorse 08-26-05 18

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1. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Good story KObrien_fan


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2. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
you always get me...I thought it was a different story and BAM --nice surprise and nice ff story




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3. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Very well written story with a punch right at the end! It begins in an idyllic way, bringing back old memories of my own, and musing how simple life could be as it once was. But after shoveling the snow, instead of going into some nearby cabin, it's into a red SUV (color clash warning!).

Then... it begs the question (and a second reading)... who's buried there under the snow? Well done!


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4. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Excellent! I really enjoyed this. You have an amazing talent for writing. I loved the twist. This could be a Twilight Zone script!



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5. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Good stuff, KO. Give us more!
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6. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Great story KT! It was just a nostalic little reflective piece chugging along and then that twist pops up and smacks ya in the head. Wonder who the body is?



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7. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Thanks Pre, the piece itself gives 2 hints as to the identity of the body...


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8. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
This is great, KO! I gathered that's where you were heading after the 'no wives and kids' sentence

You've really got a knack for giving just the right amount of 'hints' so that the reader can start to piece things together without giving away too much and too soon (based upon this and other stories from past competitions). Excellent work as always!


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9. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
ummm - Grandpa or Jamie must have done summmin bad - great story as usual

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10. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Wow. All I can say is Wow.

This is beautiful, yet insanely dark.

I think I should congratulate you. All the same, I'm never gonna piss you off. ;)


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11. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Lvoe the ending.

Thanks for sharing.

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12. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Wow, that was great! I too had to read it again after reading the end. Awesome K!
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13. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Oh, I KNOW who the body is.

Oh yea, I do.


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Nicely done, KO!

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14. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Loved the story KO! Your creative melon never ceases to amaze me. Thanks for showing this section as well! Never knew it was here, might have to enter some of my writing or am I to late?


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15. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Nope, you're not too late! Please do share something (or somethings) with us!


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16. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
I'm guessing he has killed his partner. Really good KO. You should be writing crime fiction. You are a natural at it.
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17. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Whoa! The ending certainly took me by surprise. Nicely written (glad it was in the Fiction category).


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18. "RE: SSC5 (FF) If Only Life Were That Simple Again"
Very good story and great first place finish.


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