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Devious Weasel 18752 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-02-04, 04:38 PM (EST) "WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" His first thought was of The important firsts in his life: the first day he saw his daughter (my mom); the day he held his first grandchild (me) and told him about all the things he would teach, like driving a tractor and how to help a sow birth and when to shoot, things that have had varying degrees of practicality in his grandson's (my) life; and most importantly, the day he first saw her (my grandmother), the day he decided that maybe being a farmer wouldn’t be so bad, maybe he didn’t need to leave the area and see the world and try his hand making his fortune elsewhere. It was a day he never regretted, even if she wasn’t here now and hadn’t been here for some time. His second thought was of The sign he always put on the door of the farmhouse when he went to town, the one that said “Gone to town – Be Back Soon!” He had put it on the door that day he came to town but didn’t come back soon, didn't come back at all, the day he collapsed and got put in the hospital and then moved to this room in the nursing home section of the hospital where they wouldn’t even let him leave to go home for one trip, one trip to look around and get some things, because they said the trip would kill him, and damn but he wasn’t too polite to say “I’d rather die at home than here” but he didn’t want to offend anyone, and he didn’t want them thinking he wanted to die, because he didn’t, he just wanted to be at home, among the used rubber bands and old grocery sacks and stacks of ancient newspapers, things she never threw out because she never threw out anything, and even though it always infuriated him that she never threw out anything, after she was gone he couldn’t stand the thought of throwing any of it away because it all reminded him of her and even when the pain of her going was at its worst he still wanted to be reminded of her – hell, that was when he wanted to be reminded of her the most. But he didn’t say anything, and he didn’t get to go home, and now he was hoping that one of the kids had taken the sign down because if they hadn’t, the next time it would be seen was after he was gone. And that would probably start them crying again, and he didn’t want anyone crying over him anymore than was absolutely necessary, cause he never wanted anyone crying over him. Ever. His third thought was of How bad it felt when she died, in a room just down the hall from where he was now, and how he was ready to give it all up when his son-in-law (my dad) died, and how he found new life in what was the only mission that could have kept him going, being there for his eldest daughter (my mom) to help her get through what no one should ever have to go through but what most people have to deal with sometime. His fourth thought was of How it was Christmas day, and how if you could pick the day you died, no one, NO ONE, would ever pick Christmas day, because that would be inconsiderate because from then on out everyone will always have a little sadness in them on Christmas morning and people should never have sadness in them on Christmas morning. Any other time, fine, but not Christmas morning. He hated being inconsiderate. Always had. That didn’t stop him from being that way sometimes, just meant that he hated it. His final thought was of How many people were in the room right now, people he hadn’t seen in so long, including his eldest daughter (my mom) and his first grandchild (me). How strange it was that the passed on were there with the living, and how the passed on could affect the living but the living couldn’t affect the passed on (or was it the other way around), and how it was too bad that his eldest daughter (my mom) and his first grandchild (me) didn’t see his son-in-law (my dad) but his son-in-law (my dad) told him it was okay, they could feel him even if they didn’t realize it. And then he saw her, and he saw how pretty she looked – of course, she always looked pretty – but particularly today, and he thought of how glad he was that she was here to help him leave. “Nonsense” she said, cutting through everything as she always did “where else would I be today?” His next thought was of Things that couldn’t be described to the living, which is just as well, cause even if they could be described to the living, they wouldn’t be understood by the living.   Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

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Drive My Car 20045 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-02-04, 05:53 PM (EST) 1. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Just beautiful.   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

Silvergirl1 8694 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-02-04, 06:30 PM (EST) 2. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Thanks, Weasel. This was very thought provoking, especially for me, as my dad died last year the week before Christmas. Silvergirl   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

FarmBoy 2618 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Survivor-themed Cruise Spokesperson" 01-03-04, 10:52 AM (EST) 3. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Good work DW! Bovinated BR549- An Original Draco Masterpiece It's going to be so hard to vote this time!   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

Swami 5883 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-03-04, 01:10 PM (EST) 4. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Very beuatiful, Weasel. I loved your grandpa more & more as each layer of thought was revealed. This could be either NF or FF, I think. SwamiIceCat is The One   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

Devious Weasel 18752 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-05-04, 12:21 PM (EST) 7. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" There's enough things here that are true to make it somewhat painful to write, but there's also enough things here that are false to make it fiction.   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

PhoenixMons 4696 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Stuff Magazine Centerfold" 01-03-04, 06:01 PM (EST) 5. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" I really like the run-on-ness of this story. I don't know if it was your intention, but it makes me think that everything was happening so quickly and he didn't have time to separate his thoughts into sentences so they just became one big drawn-out thought after another. I like that a lot. Also made me think back to the day I lost my grandfather (a week before my eighth birthday). We were very, very close and it hit me like an 18-wheeler. I grieved like Vada Sultenfuss (My Girl), not leaving my room, crying incessantly. Great story   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

Devious Weasel 18752 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-05-04, 12:23 PM (EST) 8. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" The run-on-ness was intentional. I have this notion that writer's should try to control the way a reader reads a piece in addition to conveying the written portion of the piece. Run-on sentences, when they are written well, do that. So do short sentences.   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

GrendelsMom 3272 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Car Show Celebrity" 01-07-04, 10:37 AM (EST) 12. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Rules are meant to be broken, when it's intentional and done with a purpose. You obviously know what you are doing. Nicely done. A JSlice masterpiece   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

PhoenixMons 4696 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Stuff Magazine Centerfold" 01-09-04, 08:59 AM (EST) 15. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" See I didn't word that sentence properly! I meant I didn't know if the intention of your run-on sentences was to make the readers feel as if everything was happening so fast that grandpa didn't have time to sort his thoughts out...they just flowed out. That's what I meant, not whether the run-ons were intentional. That I knew, silly Really, really enjoyed this story, Dweez   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

AugustGirl 11534 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-04-04, 07:39 AM (EST) 6. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Wow! Beautiful. a JSlice original. isn't she something?   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

L82LIFE 5333 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-05-04, 05:01 PM (EST) 9. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Weasel, you have a way of writing straight from the heart, to the heart. Very touching piece that's so emotional and beautiful.   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

nailbone 27248 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-06-04, 10:49 AM (EST) 10. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" Wow...Dweezil, I just...wow...*tears*... Sandra, Panama's Sole Survivor Prince of Passion, Royal Liaison to Illicit Activities, SB Video Historian and OT Studmuffin of the Year '03 o-   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

northernlights 5046 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-06-04, 03:00 PM (EST) 11. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" That was simply beautiful Mr. Weasel. Thank you for sharing with us.   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

DoodleBug 5133 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-07-04, 04:33 PM (EST) 13. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" I loved the run-on sentences too. That was just a wonderful and beautiful piece. A Kyngsladye Original   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

probably clueless 5782 desperate attention whore postings DAW Level: "Playboy Centerfold" 01-09-04, 05:58 AM (EST) 14. "RE: WSC3 (FF) Grandpa, The Day He Died" I love seeing the writing side of DW. WTG! A Kittyloaf®Original *One Legged Little Litter Box Minstrel Lover*   Remove | Alert Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

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