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"SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides"
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08-08-03, 01:13 AM (EST)
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"SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides"

I stand outside under the awning, hovering in the doorway to avoid the persistent drops that are sloshing down. I light my cigarette, and a perfectly aligned drop fizzles it out immediately. Maybe it's a sign. I relight it, anyway. I challenge this like I challenge all other miracles. If it were truly a sign, it would happen again.

I look up into the sky, blinking away the cold tears that fall from the clouds above. This break feels nice. It cuts the humidity down for a day or two, like clockwork.

It's three in the morning. This is one of my episodes of insomnia. I'm riding the wave of mania on through the apex of sleepless nights, watching infomercials and reading too many useless websites, back down to the trough of virtual coma, where the alarm clock sounds for thirty minutes before I awake to the dog licking my face, obviously worried that I wasn't ever going to get up again.

This feeling comes and goes, much like the tides of the summer rain. Highs and lows. Peaks and valleys. Apexes and troughs.

I put out the cigarette and prepare for the day to come. The transition day, where I arrive at work particularly late again, rush around all day to show I may not be punctual, but I'm still efficient, and come home and pass out. I stay asleep for the next few humid sticky days.

By the time the rain comes again I'll be back at another apex.

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 RE: SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides L82LIFE 08-08-03 1
 RE: SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides Drive My Car 08-09-03 2
 RE: SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides Lisapooh 08-19-03 3

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L82LIFE 5333 desperate attention whore postings
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08-08-03, 04:09 PM (EST)
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1. "RE: SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides"
LAST EDITED ON 08-08-03 AT 04:09 PM (EST)

This is a very haunting piece, CQ. I really liked it.

Edited because CQ's story is haunting, not aunting.

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2. "RE: SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides"
Good piece cq, I liked it.

This line is great really powerful, and tells the reader so much about you

Maybe it's a sign. I relight it, anyway. I challenge this like I challenge all other miracles. If it were truly a sign, it would happen again.



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3. "RE: SSC3 (FF) Manic Tides"
Ok, here's what I think works really really well here. There's a distance in the writing - sort of a detachment. Normally, I wouldn't like that because I want to be drawn in to character's world. But I think that is the strength of this piece because it suits who she is.

She's detached and weary and distant - it's awesome that you have captured that in her words too! I love that you don't try to make her something she's not.

Great job cq!
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